2014年6月英语四级作文点评：豫园

 　　【参考范文】

　　Yu Garden

　　If a foreign friend of mine is going to visit my hometown, Shanghai, I would like to take her to Yu Garden.

　　Yu Garden is a traditional Chinese garden located beside the City God Temple in the northeast of Shanghai. Here she will marvel¹ at the exotic and exquisite² beauty of the Chinese Garden. She can walk on the crooked³ bridge and take photos of the beautiful goldfish. Besides, she can taste the local cuisines⁴ like steamed buns, wonton noodles, soy milk. There are a variety of mouth-watering snacks there. Apart from the beautiful scenery and delicious food, she will also be attracted by the remarkable⁵ performance of different craftsmen⁶. For example, she will see Shanghai-style paper-cutting, and the process of making Chinese candy and clay figurines.

　　I believe my friend will have a great day if she visits Yu Garden. This is a place where the features of this city are combined.

　　【点评】

　　本次四级作文一反以往的图片题形式，改为情境式话题作文，可能让准备好图片题写作的同学有点措手不及。不过话题贴近生活，要求介绍自己家乡的某景点，写起来相对简单。此类文章在结构上的要求不像议论文那样严格，所以可以在语言文字上博出彩，增加词汇的丰富性、句子的流畅性都是不错的加分点。

1 marvel   

vi.(at)惊叹vt.感到惊异；n.令人惊异的事

参考例句：

• The robot is a marvel of modern engineering.机器人是现代工程技术的奇迹。
• The operation was a marvel of medical skill.这次手术是医术上的一个奇迹。

2 exquisite   

adj.精美的；敏锐的；剧烈的，感觉强烈的

参考例句：

• I was admiring the exquisite workmanship in the mosaic.我当时正在欣赏镶嵌画的精致做工。
• I still remember the exquisite pleasure I experienced in Bali.我依然记得在巴厘岛所经历的那种剧烈的快感。

3 crooked   

adj.弯曲的；不诚实的，狡猾的，不正当的

参考例句：

• He crooked a finger to tell us to go over to him.他弯了弯手指，示意我们到他那儿去。
• You have to drive slowly on these crooked country roads.在这些弯弯曲曲的乡间小路上你得慢慢开车。

4 cuisines   

n.烹饪( cuisine的名词复数 )；菜肴；（通常指昂贵的饭店中的）饭菜；烹饪艺术

参考例句：

• Could you tell me the different features of these cuisines? 能不能告诉我这些不同的烹调流派各自有哪些特点？ 来自地道口语脱口SHOW 高中超越版
• Ice sculptures are used as decorations in some cuisines, especially in Asia. 冰雕在某些菜肴中被当作装饰品，尤其在亚洲。 来自互联网

5 remarkable   

adj.显著的，异常的，非凡的，值得注意的

参考例句：

• She has made remarkable headway in her writing skills.她在写作技巧方面有了长足进步。
• These cars are remarkable for the quietness of their engines.这些汽车因发动机没有噪音而不同凡响。

6 craftsmen   

n. 技工

参考例句：

• rugs handmade by local craftsmen 由当地工艺师手工制作的小地毯
• The craftsmen have ensured faithful reproduction of the original painting. 工匠保证要复制一幅最接近原作的画。