六级写作经典范文及点评：Why I Teach

 　　教师，是一个崇高的职业。因为教师是为社会培养人才的园丁，是人类灵魂的工程师。那么，当一名老师又能给教师自己带来什么呢?

　　Why I Teach

　　I teach because I like the pace of the academic calendar. June, July, and August offer an opportunity for reflection, research and writing.

　　I teach because teaching is a profession built on change. When the material is the same, I change — and, more important, my students change.

　　I teach because I like the freedom to make my own mistakes, to learn my own lessons, to stimulate¹ myself and my students. As a teacher, I’m my own boss. If I want my freshmen² to learn to write by creating their own textbook, who is to say I can’t? Such courses may be huge failures, but we can all learn from failures.

　　I teach because I like to ask questions that students must struggle to answer. The world is full of right answers to bad questions. While teaching, I sometimes find good questions.

　　So teaching gives me pace and variety, and challenge, and the opportunity to keep on learning①.

　　However, the most important reasons why I teach are that my students grow up and change in front of me. Some have become doctoral students with excellent success and found good jobs; some have become interested in the urban poor and served as civil rights lawyers; some have decided³ to finish high school and go to college.

　　But teaching offers something besides money and power: it offers love. Not only the love of learning and of books and ideas, but also the love that a teacher feels for that rare student who walks into a teacher’s life and begins to breathe. Perhaps love is the wrong word: magic might be better.

　　I teach because, being around people who are beginning to breathe, I occasionally find myself catching⁴ my breath with them.

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　　行文点评

　　文章第一段到第四段都采用了“I teach because...”的句型开头，句式统一，在内容上构成了并列。每段的第一句即为该段的主题句，先指出自己想要当老师的原因，接着再具体进行解释。在第五段中，作者用So概括了上述原因，再次重申“Why I Teach”，呼应主题。第六段开头借助“However”一词的过渡，指出教书最重要的理由，和前文构成了语义上的递进。文章最后一段还是用I teach because...结尾，与段首相呼应，使文章显得有始有终。

1 stimulate   

vt.刺激，使兴奋；激励，使…振奋

参考例句：

• Your encouragement will stimulate me to further efforts.你的鼓励会激发我进一步努力。
• Success will stimulate the people for fresh efforts.成功能鼓舞人们去作新的努力。

2 freshmen   

n.（中学或大学的）一年级学生( freshman的名词复数 )

参考例句：

• We are freshmen and they are sophomores. 我们是一年级学生，他们是二年级学生。 来自《简明英汉词典》
• University freshmen get lots of razzing, but they like the initiation. 大一新生受各种嘲弄，但是他们对这种入门经验甘之如饴。 来自辞典例句

3 decided   

adj.决定了的，坚决的；明显的，明确的

参考例句：

• This gave them a decided advantage over their opponents.这使他们比对手具有明显的优势。
• There is a decided difference between British and Chinese way of greeting.英国人和中国人打招呼的方式有很明显的区别。

4 catching   

adj.易传染的，有魅力的，迷人的，接住

参考例句：

• There are those who think eczema is catching.有人就是认为湿疹会传染。
• Enthusiasm is very catching.热情非常富有感染力。