013年2月2日雅思写作真题点评

 　　2013年2月2日雅思写作真题点评

　　题目What are the positive and negative effects of watching TV on children?

　　孩子们看电视的优缺点。

　　开头段

　　【背景句】 As children have less time and opportunities to participate in outdoor activities, the influence of sedentary activities, such as watching television, has always been brought into the spotlight¹.

　　中间段1优点：

　　健康的和有教育意义的电视节目可以帮助孩子们扩大眼界。

　　Healthy and educational TV programmes assist children in broadening their horizons.

　　利用空闲时间看电视也是孩子们一种很好的放松方式。

　　It is a good way that children relax and enjoy themselves by watching TV in spare time.

　　中间段2缺点：

　　花过多时间看电视会对孩子们的身体健康产生严重的破坏。

　　To spend more time watching television causes serious damage to children's physical health.

　　【论证示范】

　　The reasons are twofold. For one thing, if children spend an inordinate² amount of time on watching TV, they will have less time for sports. For another thing, children tend to consume large quantities of junk food while watching TV.As a result, their physical health will be undermined.

　　电视中可能会有一些暴力和色情的节目，会毒害青少年的思想。

　　There are probably some TV programmes concerning violence and pornography, which will corrupt³ youngsters’ mind.

　　结尾段In conclusion, though television watching can contribute to the Children’s development at certain degree, the risks in children’s physical and mental health will make more parents have second thoughts about their children’s television viewing.

1 spotlight   

n.公众注意的中心，聚光灯，探照灯，视听，注意，醒目

参考例句：

• This week the spotlight is on the world of fashion.本周引人瞩目的是时装界。
• The spotlight followed her round the stage.聚光灯的光圈随着她在舞台上转。

2 inordinate   

adj.无节制的；过度的

参考例句：

• The idea of this gave me inordinate pleasure.我想到这一点感到非常高兴。
• James hints that his heroine's demands on life are inordinate.詹姆斯暗示他的女主人公对于人生过于苛求。

3 corrupt   

v.贿赂，收买；adj.腐败的，贪污的

参考例句：

• The newspaper alleged the mayor's corrupt practices.那家报纸断言市长有舞弊行为。
• This judge is corrupt.这个法官贪污。