齐辙：雅思写作改错练习（一）

 　　1Futurism, an early twentieth-century movement in art, rejected all traditions and attempts to glorify¹ contemporary life by emphasizing the machine and motion.

　　2 But, for a small group of students, professional training might be the way to go since well-developing skills, all other factors being equal, can be the difference between having a job or not.

　　3 For a group   of remaining in existence, a profit-making organization must, in the long run, produces something consumers consider useful or desirable.

　　4 For a result of two or three centuries of scientific investigation² we have come to believe that Nature is understandable in the sense that when we ask her questions by way of appropriate observations and experiments，she will answer truly and reward us with discoveries that endure.

　　5 At the same time, young people should be encourage to communicate with their peers and develop their interpersonal skills, which may help them greatly to reduce dependence³ in their parents.

　　6 When a new movement in art attains⁴ a certain fashion, it is advisable to find out what their advocates are aiming at, for, however farfetched and unreasonable⁵ their principles may seem today, it is possible that in years to come they may be regarded as normal.

　　7 Numerous other commercial enterprises, from theaters to magazine publishers, from gas and electric utilities to milk processors, bring better and more efficiently⁶ services to consumers through the use of computers.

　　8 The American economic system is, organizing around a basically private-enterprise, market-oriented economy in that consumers largely determine what shall be produced by spending their money in the marketplace for those goods and services that they want most.

　　9 Thus, in the American economic system it is the demand of individual consumers, coupled with the desire of businessmen to maximize profits and the desire of individuals to maximize their incomes, which together determine what shall be produced and how resources are used to produce it.

　　10 The individual now has more information available than any generation, and the task of finding that one information relevant to his or her specific problem is complicated, time--consuming, and sometimes even overwhelming.

　　参考答案

　　1Futurism, an early twentieth-century movement in art, rejected all traditions and attempts to glorify contemporary life by emphasizing the machine and motion.

　　错误: and并列连接两个谓语，应该是平行结构。所以attempts应该改为attempted.

　　2 But, for a small group of students, professional training might be the way to go since well-developing skills, all other factors being equal, can be the difference between having a job or not.

　　错误: 培养良好的技能不是well-developing而是well-developed.

　　3 For a group   of remaining in existence, a profit-making organization must, in the long run, produces something consumers consider useful or desirable.

　　错误: For a group   of remaining in existence应该是For a group   to remain in existence.只有后者才可以做一个目的状语。produces应该是produce，因为在插入语in the long run的前边有must.

　　4 For a result of two or three centuries of scientific investigation， we have come to believe that Nature is understandable in the sense that when we ask her questions by way of appropriate observations and experiments，she will answer truly and reward us with discoveries that endure.

　　错误: For a result of应该是As a result of.介词搭配不当.

　　5 At the same time, young people should be encourage to communicate with their peers and develop their interpersonal skills, which may help them greatly to reduce dependence in their parents.

　　错误: should be encourage应该是should be encouraged,情态动词的被动语态. dependence in应该是dependence on, 介词搭配不当.

　　6 When a new movement in art attains a certain fashion, it is advisable to find out what their advocates are aiming at, for, however farfetched and unreasonable their principles may seem today, it is possible that in years to come they may be regarded as normal.

　　错误: their advocates应该是its advocates. Its在这里指代的是a new movement in art.所以不能是their.

　　7 Numerous other commercial enterprises, from theaters to magazine publishers, from gas and electric utilities to milk processors, bring better and more efficiently services to consumers through the use of computers.

　　错误: efficiently services应该是efficient services. 这也是许多学生经常犯的一个错误。副词不能修饰名词，必须得改为形容词。

　　8 The American economic system is, organizing around a basically private-enterprise, market-oriented economy in that consumers largely determine what shall be produced by spending their money in the marketplace for those goods and services that they want most.

　　错误: organizing around a basically private-enterprise应该是organized around a basically private-enterprise.这里应该是过去分词来做一个伴随状语，而不应该是现在分词，因为它是主语的承受者。in that应该是in which.因为只有in which才能引导一个定语从句。in which=where, 在引导一个定语从句时，后面需要加上一个完整句。而in that只能引导一个状语从句=because.

　　9 Thus, in the American economic system it is the demand of individual consumers, coupled with the desire of businessmen to maximize profits and the desire of individuals to maximize their incomes, which together determine what shall be produced and how resources are used to produce it.

　　错误: which应该是that.与前面的it is构成一个强调句型。强调原句中的主语。

　　10 The individual now has more information available than any generation, and the task of finding that one information relevant to his or her specific problem is complicated, time--consuming, and sometimes even overwhelming.

　　错误: one information应该是one piece of information. 因为information是不可数名词，前面必须加量词修饰。

1 glorify   

vt.颂扬，赞美，使增光，美化

参考例句：

• Politicians have complained that the media glorify drugs.政治家们抱怨媒体美化毒品。
• We are all committed to serving the Lord and glorifying His name in the best way we know.我们全心全意敬奉上帝，竭尽所能颂扬他的美名。

2 investigation   

n.调查，调查研究

参考例句：

• In an investigation,a new fact became known, which told against him.在调查中新发现了一件对他不利的事实。
• He drew the conclusion by building on his own investigation.他根据自己的调查研究作出结论。

3 dependence   

n.依靠，依赖；信任，信赖；隶属

参考例句：

• Doctors keep trying to break her dependence of the drug.医生们尽力使她戒除毒瘾。
• He was freed from financial dependence on his parents.他在经济上摆脱了对父母的依赖。

4 attains   

（通常经过努力）实现( attain的第三人称单数 )； 达到； 获得； 达到（某年龄、水平、状况）

参考例句：

• This is the period at which the body attains maturity. 这是身体发育成熟的时期。
• The temperature a star attains is determined by its mass. 恒星所达到的温度取决于它的质量。

5 unreasonable   

adj.不讲道理的，不合情理的，过度的

参考例句：

• I know that they made the most unreasonable demands on you.我知道他们对你提出了最不合理的要求。
• They spend an unreasonable amount of money on clothes.他们花在衣服上的钱太多了。

6 efficiently   

adv.高效率地，有能力地

参考例句：

• The worker oils the machine to operate it more efficiently.工人给机器上油以使机器运转更有效。
• Local authorities have to learn to allocate resources efficiently.地方政府必须学会有效地分配资源。