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雅思写作:增强语句表现力的五大王牌
一、避免使用语意弱的“be”动词。
1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如:
Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab. Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)
Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定语)
2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如:
1)
Weak: The team members are good players.
Revision: The team members play well.
2)
Revision: One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.
3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中,把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例如:
1)
Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.
2)
Weak: Here are the books you ordered.
Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.
二、多用语意具体的动词,保持句意简洁明了。例如:
1、
Poor: My supervisor4 went past my desk.
Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
2、
Poor: She is a careful shopper.
Better: She compares prices and quality.
三、尽量运用主动语态。例如:
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Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.
Better: Charity has supported the organization.
2、
Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.
四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如:
1、
Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.
2、
Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
3、
Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
4、
Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.
Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.
五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如:
1、
Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.
2、
Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.
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1 elimination | |
n.排除,消除,消灭 | |
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2 tardiness | |
n.缓慢;迟延;拖拉 | |
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3 promotion | |
n.提升,晋级;促销,宣传 | |
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4 supervisor | |
n.监督人,管理人,检查员,督学,主管,导师 | |
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5 redundant | |
adj.多余的,过剩的;(食物)丰富的;被解雇的 | |
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6 input | |
n.输入(物);投入;vt.把(数据等)输入计算机 | |
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7 expenditures | |
n.花费( expenditure的名词复数 );使用;(尤指金钱的)支出额;(精力、时间、材料等的)耗费 | |
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