这句英语怎么说第121期:自我介绍范文及批改

 　　Red 的原文

　　My name is Wang Yi-yang, and my English name is Red. I come from China, I participate in this work and travel program for many reasons. First of all, I would like to broaden¹ my horizons², to see the world outside and experience the different cultures and customs³. Second if I can successfully⁴ come to USA and work for a few month, I will get a very valuable oversea experience. This experience will be very helpful for me in the future. Third, as we know, the USA is a very beautiful country, everybody wants to travel there and me too. After I finish my job, I’ll take some time to travel around. I would like to go to Las Vegas and Los Angeles. My friend told me that these two cities are particularly awesome⁵. About my work experience, I used to work in the Apple shop for two summer vacations. That was 2008 and 2009 mainly to introduce and sell Apple products to the customers. Last summer I worked on a music radio, mainly to choose the songs that played on the radio and this summer vacation, I hope that I can work in the USA. That must be cool and interesting. I have a lot of hobbies such like sports especially soccer and reading, movie and music. Well, this is my basic information. I hope to see you soon. Bye-bye.

　　经过Mr. Wong修改的正确版

　　My name is Wang Yi-yang, and my English name is Red. I come from China and I am participating in this work and travel program for many reasons. First of all, I would like to broaden my horizons, to see the outside world and experience X different cultures and customs. Second if I can successfully go to the USA and work for a few months, it will be a very valuable overseas⁶ experience. This experience will be very helpful for me in the future. Third, as we know, the USA is a very beautiful country and everybody wants to travel there, including myself. After I finish my job, I’ll take some time to travel around. I would like to go to Las Vegas and Los Angeles. My friend told me that these two cities are particularly awesome. About/in regards to my work experience, I worked in the Apple shop for two summer vacations. That was in 2008 and 2009, mainly to introduce and sell Apple products to X customers. Last summer I worked at a radio station, mainly to choose the songs that were played on the radio show. X This summer vacation, I hope that I can work in the USA - that would be cool and interesting. I have a lot of hobbies such as sports, especially soccer. I also enjoy reading, movie and music. Well, this is my basic information. I hope to see you soon. Bye-bye.

1 broaden   

v.放宽，变宽，扩大

参考例句：

• We broaden in experiences by traveling.旅行增长我们的经验。
• Let's broaden out the discussion to talk about education as a whole.我们来扩大一下讨论范围，全面谈谈教育问题。

2 horizons   

n.地平线( horizon的名词复数 )；范围；界限；眼界

参考例句：

• The course in philosophy opened up new horizons for the students. 哲学课使学生们打开了新的视野。 来自《现代汉英综合大词典》
• Her words widened his horizons. 她的一番话使他的心里开豁了。 来自《现代汉英综合大词典》

3 customs   

n.海关，关税

参考例句：

• The customs officials turned the man over to the French police.海关官员把那个人移交给了法国警察。
• They are collecting customs.他们正在收缴关税。

4 successfully   

adv.圆满地；顺利地；成功地

参考例句：

• The meeting passed off successfully.会议开得很成功。
• At last we successfully put through the business deal.最终我们成功地完成了这桩交易。

5 awesome   

adj.令人惊叹的，难得吓人的，很好的

参考例句：

• The church in Ireland has always exercised an awesome power.爱尔兰的教堂一直掌握着令人敬畏的权力。
• That new white convertible is totally awesome.那辆新的白色折篷汽车简直棒极了.

6 overseas   

adj.海外的；adv.在海外

参考例句：

• Her man has been sent overseas by his employers.她的丈夫已被雇主派往海外。
• Many firms are focusing on increasing their markets overseas.许多商行都专注于扩大国外市场。