2013年2月16日雅思写作回忆及范文

　　图表类型：

　　柱状图

　　作文题目 ：

　　84年、94年、04年，the rating¹ of 5 factors for a good manager比较好雇主的五个因素在84、94、04这三年间的变化

　　写作指导：

　　三段式写法：

　　第一段：概述柱状图信息

　　第二段：横向比较这五个决定因素在三个年份里总体的趋势（最高值因素和最低值因素）；再描述三个年份里五个因素的变化（每一个因素所占比重的增加或减少）

　　第三段：总结这三个年份里变化最大的因素或三个年份里一直占比重最大（最小）的因素。

　　A类大作文

　　作文题目：Some people think all lawbreakers should be taken in to prison, others believe that there are better alternatives, (for example, being work to do which is beneficial for local community). Discuss both views and give your own opinion.一些人认为所有的罪犯都应该送进监狱，而其他人却认为还有其他好的方式代替入狱惩罚。请就两个观点进行讨论，并提出自己的观点。

　　题型类别:表立场观点类

　　考题难度同2012.05.12犯罪率传统经典题目

　　写作解析：监狱的功能：1威慑潜在犯罪者；2让犯罪者付出代价；3平衡受害者心理监狱的缺陷：费纳税人钱惩罚犯人的方式：1道德教育比如读圣经；2就业技能培训，帮助犯人重拾生活信心与能力；3减少歧视避免二次犯罪犯罪的原因归纳：1减少贫富差距与贫困人口；2提供免费primary & secondary education；3社会陷阱与不良信息；4家庭教育

　　写作指导：首段，赞同题目观点；第二段，罪犯在监狱里什么都不做是花着纳税人的钱的；第三段，没有接受教育和不幸的家庭是原因，要教育，要给他们机会；第四段；当然要惩罚，但惩罚和治疗并用。末段总结。

　　范文指导：How to handle criminals is a problem that all countries and societies face. Traditionally, the approach has been to punish them by placing them in prisons to pay for what they have done. Some, however, advocate for trying to make them better with training and education and it seems they may have a good point.

　　First of all, consider all the money that we have to spend to lock people up in jail. It doesn’t seem like a good use of public money if the people don’t actually get any better. Because most criminals eventually are let out of prison, our focus should be on making them better citizens.

　　In fact, the reason why many people end up in jail in the first place is because they didn’t have a good education or happy family. So if they can learn job skills they perhaps can find work and feel they can contribute in a positive way. If they do this, they won’t need crime. Surly everyone deserves a second chance.

　　Of course this does not mean that we should be too lenient² on criminals. Those who commit crime should still be punished, but during their punishment they should also be treated. If we make an investment in them and show compassion³, most will be able to make a new start.

　　To summarize, we must make more of an effort to go to the root of the problem. We need to treat criminals as patients and give them the medicine they need: education and training. By giving people the skills for a second chance we can make our society safer and healthier.

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