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2013年6月英语四级写作分析以及例文

时间：2015-08-15 03:35:38

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 　　以下为2013年6月大学英语四级写作分析以及例文，由文都教育提供，考完试的同学可以看一下，备考的同学也可以研究一下考题。希望大家四级考试顺利通过。

　　第一部分：考试分析
　　一：形式
　　1. 有图片，图片要点为：一对父子就一个问题展开讨论；
　　2，英文提示：a 简要描述图片；b 给出有关于主题“the importance of doing small things before undertaking1 something big”的观点
　　二．写作应对
　　1. 简要描述图片：
　　简要描述，即，描述图中主题，并引出相关的主题即可，故可以结合考研春季基础班讲义，使用描述句式如下：
　　A：简单型
　　As we can see from the picture，there are two persons, debating about the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big, who are a father and his son.
　　B：复杂型
　　As is vividly2 depicted3 in the picture, two men ，who are a father and his son，are talking about what should be done firstly，the small thing or the big ones.Simple as it is, what the picture conveys to us is thought-provoking.
　　2. 判断写作类型：
　　题干中有明显的两种观点，即先做小事，或者大事，只不过，出题人要求学生写的是关于先做小事的重要的意义，故可以使用两种观点对立的“观点分型”写作模板带入如下：
　　第一段：说明现象
　　第二段：观点讨论
　　第三段：观点总结
　　3. 主题
　　该主题，可以被分为三个部分，即：
　　A：the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big
　　B：doing small things
　　C: doing something big
　　以上三个内容在每段中确保出现1-2次，该作文便不跑题。
　　第二部分：例文写作与模板对比
　　第一段：描述图片+说明现象
　　As we can see from the picture，there are two persons, debating about the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big, who are a father and his son. Recently, the issue of the importance of doing small things has aroused wide concern among the public. Especially the young generation living in the big cities, they tend to do the big ones firstly, paying no attention to the fact that this behavior may pose underlying4 threat to their precious life and may even endanger others.
　　（原有模板）
　　Nowadays/recently, the phenomenon/ issue of …… has arouse wide concern among the public. Especially the young generation living in the big cities/metropolis, they tend to do sth, ignoring/paying no attention to the fact that this behavior may pose underlying threat to their precious life and may even endanger others.
　　第二段：观点讨论
　　Does anyone claim the same attitude towards this issue?Definitely not，actually,opinions vary from person to person.Some maintain that the doing some big is beneficial to students.However,quite a few people hold the opposite opinion that the doing some big is detrimental5 to the youngsters, and they think that the merits of students’ doing some small things far outweigh6 its demerits.To my way of thinking,we should know the the importance that why we must do small things before we undertake something big. If we know the significance,we will choice the right way and do the right things.
　　（原有模板）
　　Does anyone maintain/claim the same attitude towards this issue/phenomenon? Definitely not，actually/in fact，opinions vary from person to person.Some maintain/argue/hold/claim that something is beneficial to sth.However，quite a few people hold the opposite opinion that something is detrimental to sth .The demerits/disadvantages of sth. far outweigh its merits/advantages.
　　第三段：观点总结
　　the problem of doing big things firstly mentioned above will bound to generate severe consequences if measures should be adopted before the thing get worse.What we should do is to encourage the merits and diminish the demerits to the least extent. It is high time that all of us ,parents,educators,and the authorities, make combined efforts to let young men know the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big .With these measures taken, it is reasonable for us to believe that this problem can be perfectly7 solved in the near future
　　（原有模板）
　　To my way of thinking\From my perspective, The problem mentioned above will bound to generate severe consequences if we keep turning a blind eye and deaf ear to it.
　　Measures should be adopted before things get worse.What we should do is to encourage the merits and diminish the demerits to the least extent.It is high time that all of us ,parents，educators，and the authorities, make combined efforts to put an end to this situation.We should appeal to the relevant administration departments to strengthen supervision8 over.With these measures taken, it is reasonable for us to believe that this problem can be perfectly solved in the near future
　　总结：
　　改作文中，第二段落内容容易较为单薄，故建议同学们将原模板的第三段内容中，我的观点写到第二段的结尾处，已调整三段之间比例。
　　最后，还是那句话，我们不押题，我们只相信自己的实力!任你出题人几路来，我只一路前行，为了自己的未来！

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1 undertaking Mfkz7S     
n.保证，许诺，事业
参考例句：
  • He gave her an undertaking that he would pay the money back with in a year.他向她做了一年内还钱的保证。
  • He is too timid to venture upon an undertaking.他太胆小，不敢从事任何事业。
2 vividly tebzrE     
adv.清楚地，鲜明地，生动地
参考例句：
  • The speaker pictured the suffering of the poor vividly.演讲者很生动地描述了穷人的生活。
  • The characters in the book are vividly presented.这本书里的人物写得栩栩如生。
3 depicted f657dbe7a96d326c889c083bf5fcaf24     
描绘，描画( depict的过去式和过去分词 )； 描述
参考例句：
  • Other animals were depicted on the periphery of the group. 其他动物在群像的外围加以修饰。
  • They depicted the thrilling situation to us in great detail. 他们向我们详细地描述了那激动人心的场面。
4 underlying 5fyz8c     
adj.在下面的，含蓄的，潜在的
参考例句：
  • The underlying theme of the novel is very serious.小说隐含的主题是十分严肃的。
  • This word has its underlying meaning.这个单词有它潜在的含义。
5 detrimental 1l2zx     
adj.损害的，造成伤害的
参考例句：
  • We know that heat treatment is detrimental to milk.我们知道加热对牛奶是不利的。
  • He wouldn't accept that smoking was detrimental to health.他不相信吸烟有害健康。
6 outweigh gJlxO     
vt.比...更重，...更重要
参考例句：
  • The merits of your plan outweigh the defects.你制定的计划其优点胜过缺点。
  • One's merits outweigh one's short-comings.功大于过。
7 perfectly 8Mzxb     
adv.完美地，无可非议地，彻底地
参考例句：
  • The witnesses were each perfectly certain of what they said.证人们个个对自己所说的话十分肯定。
  • Everything that we're doing is all perfectly above board.我们做的每件事情都是光明正大的。
8 supervision hr6wv     
n.监督，管理
参考例句：
  • The work was done under my supervision.这项工作是在我的监督之下完成的。
  • The old man's will was executed under the personal supervision of the lawyer.老人的遗嘱是在律师的亲自监督下执行的。